In-Class Writing: Sensory List

5 Concept Words:

1. Hate->
-Looks like: Resting bitch face
-Sounds like: Sobs in the middle of the night
-Smells like: Fire burning personal items
-Tastes like: Bitterness
-Feels like: Blood is boiling
-Reminds me of: Abandonment
-Is the opposite of: Love ❤
-Is: My biological father abandoning me

2. Love->
-Looks like: A mother holding her newborn baby
-Sounds like: “I love you”
-Smells like: Freshly baked cinnamon rolls
-Tastes like: Homemade menudo
-Feels like: Warmness in your heart
-Reminds me of: My mother always making sure I had what I needed
-Is the opposite of: Hate
-Is: My mother being the best single parent in the cosmos

3. Disappointment->
-Looks like: A parent not showing up to a concert
-Sounds like: “Next time I promise”
-Smells like: I can smell my own tears as they run down my face
-Tastes like: Nothing tastes good
-Feels like: Your heart slowly breaking
-Reminds me of: Constant broken promises
-Is the opposite of: Proud
-Is: Not living up to expectations

4. Happiness->
-Looks like: My mom’s face when her boyfriend is home from the road
-Sounds like: Hearing his diesel pulling into the driveway
-Smells like: My step-dad’s cologne
-Tastes like: That first dinner out once he home
-Feels like: When my step-dad hugs me
-Reminds me of: Looking forward to him coming home
-Is the opposite of: Sadness
-Is: Knowing my step-dad truly loves me with all his heart

5. Proud
-Looks like: My step-dad’s when I saw him on graduation
-Sounds like: Hearing both him and my mom over the crowd
-Smells like: The flowers I got from my mom and step-dad
-Tastes like: Mexican candy we share after graduation
-Feels like: I am floating on a cloud
-Reminds me of: The promise to always make him proud
-Is the opposite of: Disappointment
-Is: Always being told how proud he is of me

Narrative Essay #2 Rough Draft 1

Karyn Clark

Janel Spencer

Writing 101S

Date

Stepdad vs Biological Dad

Rough Draft #1

Argument: “Any man can be a father, but it takes someone special to be a dad.” Unknown. My biological father is not my dad. My mother’s boyfriend is the man I consider my dad.

Characters:

-Mother: Stephanie Clark (Moreno)

-Father: John Clark

-Mother’s boyfriend: Adam Brady

            Memories:

John Clark- I remember my mother asking me if I wanted to talk to my father. I remember seeing him and feeling overjoyed that I now had my father in my life. I remember when he broke my heart 3 times. Once when I was a child, once as a teenager, and finally as an adult. I remember my Navy Recruiter telling me that my father almost didn’t sign the consent form for me to leave for bootcamp

Adam Brady: He has always been there since 2013 and supported me in whatever I wanted to do. The late-night drives with my mom and her boyfriend are some of the best memories. My mom’s boyfriend helped raise even though he had two other daughters. I remember being nervous before asking him if I could call him dad and almost crying when he said he has always considered me his daughter.

In-Class Writing

Choose one character and describe them
-Character: John Andrew Clark
-Physical Features: Height is 6’1″, skinny and doesn’t eat healthy, blonde hair, blue eyes. Missing most of his teeth due to drugs and poor dental hygiene, not very approachable (male version of resting bitch face), slouches a lot. Not a very trendy man and doesn’t like to “dress up for anything”. He hate tuxedos.
-Important Interactions: Never gives proper hug, just gives awkward side hugs. He is a very silent person till he starts drinking. Won’t voluntarily check his numbers for his diabetes. Is a stubborn man when it comes to trying to do any sort of activity. He never take a day off from work. He stands as still as a statue (sometimes wonder if he is still breathing). I have never seen the man crack a smile before in my life. He starts to either tap his fingers against a solid object or he tugs the bottom of his shirt when he is at the center of attention. He stays in the shadows at parties so people don’t talk to him.
-Key Phrases: “Fuck off” is a common one. “You’re the best.” is the greatest lie he told me. “I will always be there” he tells to anyone who will listen.

In-Class 10/15/2019

5 “W”s
When: Age 5-19
Where: My home in Arizona
Who: My mother, step-day, and biological father
What: How my step-dad is my only dad and my resentment towards my biological father
Why: Very difficult subject, but something I feel I need to write

5 Senses
Hearing: Hearing my mother cry when my biological father left; her tears of joy when I called my step-dad that he my only dad
Taste: None
Sight: Seeing my biological father at the age of 13; always seeing my step-dad when he comes home from the road
Touch: Writing to my biological father how much of a piece of shit he is; my mom and step-dad hugging me after my Navy Bootcamp Graduation
Smell: None I can remember for now
I remember when my biological father broke my heart on several occasions and how he made up excuses for why he did those things. I remember my step-dad always being there for me even though I am not his biological child. I remember all the fun times my mom, step-dad, and I have had over the years.
I don’t remember when my biological father called me, but my mother says he did when I was about 8 years-old. I don’t remember asking my mom why her and my biological dad were not living together.

In Class Writing-Outline to Essay 2

  1. Exposition

My mother, Stephanie Clark, married a man named John Andrew Clark who later became her ex-husband do to an affair. Fast forward to the beginning of 2014 when my mom her boyfriend, Adam Brady, got together. In recent years I have considered Adam my only father due to the fact that he took care of my mom and a daughter that was not his, while John Clark pretended he didn’t have one.

2. Conflict

John Clark is my biological father who was not in my life till I was 13 and even then I didn’t really see him. I knew he was unreliable from a young age when he decided to move out of the state without so much as a goodbye. From then on it was nothing but disappointment and the feeling of not being wanted, but I still dreamed he would come back into my life.

3. Rising Action

The disappointment grew till I was 18. John never showed up to any birthday parties, but sent my step-mother and half- brother instead. He never showed to any marching band or symphonic band concerts throughout high school.

4. Climax

When I graduated I wanted to see my biological father standing proud, but instead he didn’t see me walk across the stage due to being late and when he finally showed up he gave me an awkward side hug then left.

5. Falling Action

My mother and her boyfriend may have only been together for 6 years, but in those 6 years he has been there for me more than my biological father. He showed early with my family to my graduation, looked at me with the proudest smile, supported me in my Navy career, and drove out to attend my military bootcamp graduation.

6. Resolution

After my high school graduation I was hit the reality that my biological father never wanted to actually be my father, but my mother’s boyfriend was willing to raise a daughter who wasn’t his. It was then I decided that Adam Brady was my only father in my life.

7. Argument

Not all biological fathers are good and some step-fathers are meant to be those kids fathers

In-Class Writing Part 1

  • Had you written a rhetorical analysis before? What aspects of a rhetorical analysis did you learn about that you hadn’t considered before?
  1. I haven’t written a rhetorical analysis paper in about 4-6 years. I re-learned MLA format and how to put in a hanging indent
  • What did you learn about your piece or your author’s perspective that you otherwise wouldn’t have discovered?

2. I learned that I should stop and try to think about the other person’s moral value to have better conversations.

  • What are the ways you effectively prepared, revised, and bettered your writing for the Essay 1 final draft? What ways do you wish to continue to improve for Essay 2 and 3?

3. I prepared for Essay 1 by listening to my TED Talk almost every night while writing. I had my cousin and mother help me revise the essay. Having someone else read my essay really helped me figure out what info I needed to take out and what else I may have needed to add.

  • What questions do you still have about rhetorical analysis? What questions do you have about the writing process? About grammar?

4. I have a hard time deciding which paragraph to put Logos, Pathos, and Ethos in. I know I need to work on where to correctly put commas in a sentence.

Writing 101S-Essay 1

Karyn Clark

Janel Spencer

Writing 101S

10 October 2019

Civil Political Conversations

            Social Psychologist, Robb Willer in his TED Talk, “How to have better political conversations” published September 2016, addresses the topic of the political divide in America and argues that it is the worst it has ever been in centuries. He supports this claim by telling the audience how divided our political parties are, then explains conservative and liberal moral values. Then discusses a moral study he conducted using various types of essays, and finally discusses a solution on how our country can come back together. Willer’s purpose, of this TED Talk, is to help others have better conversations when it comes to politics; so, when certain topics arise, we can overcome them together as a nation. He adopts to a serious tone for his audience, listeners, and others interested in this topic, so they can better understand other political party ideologies and how to have reasonable conversations between those individuals. I will be analyzing how Willer uses his credibility, as a social psychologist to describe conservative and liberal moral values, uses movie references to help simplify parties mindsets of being the good/bad guys, a study he did on moral reframing with the use of essays, and how we can come together as a nation to fix this divide.

            One of Willer’s main claims is that the United States of America is more divided now than in the past two decades. He supports his claim by referencing his own studies and talking about how the political hatred is a result of different deep moral values. In these studies, he continues to show, how and why both conservatives and liberals drift further and further apart. Willer uses the “robust findings” in political psychology by Jon Haidt and Jesse Graham in his seminar. They state conservative morals are focused around loyalty, patriotism, respect for authority, and moral purity, while liberal morals are focused on equality, fairness, care, and protection from harm. When Willer states, “And I think that most alarming of all of it is seeing this rising animosity on both sides,” he is effective in showing the audience that this can be seen in today’s mainstream media. When he declares that most people, “don’t want their children to marry someone who supports the other party, a particularly shocking statistic” he wants to help the audience think about how they might be choosing their own political parties over the potential happiness of their child/children. Knowing about conservative and liberal moral values helps Willer understand why both don’t like each other and why they tend to always talk past one another.

            When using movie references to explain to the audience how divided our country is and who each political party thinks they are, one of the examples Willer uses is that we are in a zombie movie and each party thinks they are the “Brad Pitt” in this situation, but are they? Conservatives and liberals want to think they are the good guy who saves the day and their counterparts are the mindless beings intent on destroying the very fabric of society to spread their horrible disease, but is this true? When Willer claims, “I think that the truth is that we’re all a part of this” it is one way of explaining that both parties are not the good guys, but maybe they are the bad guys. Later in the seminar Willer goes into his second movie on instead of a zombie movie maybe we are in a buddy cop film instead. It’s the type of film where the partners never get along in the beginning because one cop is organized while the other is sloppy which inhibits their ability to get any work done due to this difference. Willer goes to say, “it’s usually worst in the second act when our leads are further apart than ever before. And so maybe that’s where we are in this country, late in the second act of a buddy cop movie torn apart but about to come back together” to make the audience laugh a little and helped explain his view on the subject.

            Willer, along side his colleague Matt Feinburg, conducted a study using a technique called moral reframing. In the first study Willer and Feinburg recruited liberals to write an essay trying to convince conservatives to legalize same-sex marriage. What they discovered was 69% liberals invoked liberal morals of fairness and equality while 9% invoke more conservative morals. The second part of the study Willer and Feinburg recruited conservatives to write a persuasive on making English the official language in America. What was discovered was that about 59% of conservatives wrote more conservative values of patriotism and loyalty. From the data collected the audience can see how these moral values run deep and it’s going to be very hard to change those very values. Willer and Feinburg recruited liberal and conservatives, in their last study, and have them read 3 essays on the environment. The first group was tasked with reading the first pro-environmental essay which invoked more liberal moral values using loaded phrases like, “we are causing real harm” and “it is essential that we take steps now to prevent further destruction.” Another group read another pro-environmental essay but this one invoked the more conservative values with phrases like, “Keeping our forests, drinking water, and skies pure is of vital importance” and “We should regard the pollution of the places we live in to be disgusting.” They found that no matter what essay liberals read they tended to be pro-environmentalist regardless, but conservatives were more for progressive environmental policies if they read the moral purity essay. The studies Willer and Feinburg conducted helped Willer find a possible solution to our divide.

            Willer used his past studies to form a solution to help this divide and help individuals have better conversations. This solution is to connect to the opposite parties’ deep moral values. When Willer states:

“Studied this on a whole slew of different political issues. So if you want to move conservatives on issues like same-sex marriage or national health insurance, it helps to tie these liberal political issues to conservative values like patriotism and moral purity. And we studied it the other way, too. If you want to move liberals to the right on conservative policy issues like military spending and making English the official language of the US, you’re going to be more persuasive if you tie those conservative policy issues to liberal moral values like equality and fairness.”

This may sound like an easy solution, but people tend to talk past others when it comes to political policies instead of trying to tap into those individual’s moral values. If Americans want to start coming back together as a nation, then we need to start tapping into the opposite party’s moral values which in turn will start passing policies to change the world.

            Willer makes a calling to his audience to come back together as nation because we owe it one another and we can’t afford to let the hate divide us any longer. The audience has more middle aged to older people, but as a younger listener this is a very moving TED Talk because this divide is only going to get worse if we do not start agreeing on important policies. The constant phrase, that Willer uses in the last part of his seminar, “empathy and respect” is emotionally loaded and makes the audience think about how they talk to someone who is of the opposite political party. Coming together as a nation is the least, we each other as citizens.

Works Cited

Willer, Robb. “How to have better political conversations.” TED Talk, September 2016https://www.ted.com/talks/robb_willer_how_to_have_better_political_conversations/transcript?language=en

In-Class: Grammar Guide

Grammar Guide

10/02/2019

  • Sentences/ Complete Sentences/ Independent Clauses
    • An independent clause is a sentence that can stand on its own and make sense
    • A dependent clause is a fragment. Cannot stand on its own and make no sense
    • How to create a sentence: Subject->verb->complete thought
    • 1. Fixing sentence fragments
      • May be missing subject
      • May be missing verb
      • Subordinate Conjunctions:
        • After, although, as, as if, as though, because, before, except, if, since, though, unless, until, when, whereas
      • Relative Pronouns:
        • That, what, whatever, which, who, whoever, whom, whose
      • Example:
        • Fragment
          • Although he wanted to go to the meeting
          • Whoever goes to the meeting
        • Complete sentences:
          • Although he wanted to go to the meeting, his doctor advised him to stay home.
          • Whoever goes to the meeting should bring back handouts for the rest of the group
    • 2.Fixing Run-On sentences
      • A sentence that combines two independent clause w/o punctuations
      • Fused sentence
      • Comma splice
        • Instead of comma insert a period after first independent clause
        • Can put semi-colon in between independent clauses
        • If you keep comma add conjunction
          • F- “For”
          • A- “And”
          • N- “Nor”
          • B- “But”
          • O- “Or”
          • Y- “Yet”
          • S- “So”
  • Capitalization:
    • Capitalize the first word
      • The first word of a sentence
      • The first word in the greeting and closing of letters and emails. (Dear, so and so, Yours truly)
      • The first and land word and important words in titles of literary or art works (books, songs, short stories, poems, articles, movie titles, magazines, ect.)
        • Conjunctions, articles, and prepositions with less than five letters are not capitalized unless they are first or last words.
          • Near, in, at, out, for, on, by, with
      • The first word of a direct quotation (“We are going home,” said Dad)
      • Capitalize names, initials, and titles of people
        • The pronoun “I”
        • The names and nicknames of people
        • Family names when used with or in place of the person’s name unless it is preceded by a possessive nun or pronoun (Aunt Sarah, Mom, but not my mother)
        • Titles or degrees used with, or in place of, people’s names, (Ms., Dr. Smith, Captain)
  • Punctuation:
    • End Marks:
      • Use a (.) for declarative sentences
      • Use a (?) for interrogative sentences
      • Use a (!) for exclamatory sentences or interjections
      • Use a (.) or (!) for imperative sentences
    • Commas to Make Meaning Clear
      • Use commas to separate words or phrases in a series (We bought tequila, margarita mix, and ice.)
      • Use commas to separate introductory words such as yes, well, oh, no from the rest of the sentence. (Oh, I didn’t know that.)
      • Use commas to separate nouns of direct address from the rest of the sentence (Mom, do I have to go to school?)
      • Use comma to set off appositives (Sue, the girl next door, like to draw)
        • DO NOT use commas to set off appositives that are identifying a person or thing by answering the question, which one? (My brother Tim is riding in the horse show.)
      • Use commas to set off parenthetical expressions that provide additional information that can be easily removed with out changing the meaning of the sentence.
      • Use a comma to set off two or more introductory prepositional phrases (prepositions-often give us more information about time, place, and movement: in, before, after, at, down, across, inside, out, outside, for, by, on, between, behind, under, around, against, near, though, throughout), when the prepositional phrase is very long (four words or more), or when a comma is needed to make the meaning clear. (In the late fall of 1991, Mr. Jordan was elected mayor. After her incredibly complicated and exhaustingly emotional day, the grieving woman cried herself to sleep.  On Friday, Freddy, Frank, and Frodo went to the movies.)
      • Use a comma after an introductory participle and an introductory participle phrase (phrase that give more information about a noun) or a nonessential participle phrase or nonessential clauses.  (Plagued by deficits, many cites need state aid. Roy Pearce, standing by the door, is first in our class.)
      • Use a comma when separating two or more adjectives before a noun that are not connected by a conjunction. If the sentence reads smoothly when placing the word and between the two adjectives, use a comma. If it doesn’t, don’t use the comma. (We followed the steep, narrow road to their mountain cabin.)
      • Use a comma or set of commas to set off too in a sentence when too means also. (Air pollution, too, causes problems.)
    • Commas in Sentence Structures:
      • Use a comma before a coordinate conjunction when writing a compound sentence. The coordinate conjunctions are: for, and, nor, but, or, yet, and so.  (The alien flew around my head, but I ignored it.)
      • Use a comma when writing a complex sentence in which the subordinate clause precedes the independent clause. Subordinate clauses will begin with subordinate conjunctions such as: after, although, as, as soon as, because, before, even though, except, if, since, so that, than, that, though, unless, when, where, while, or until.  (As soon as it stops raining, we will leave for the beach. We will leave for the beach as soon as it stops raining.)
    • Semi-colons:
      • Use semicolons to separate independent clauses that are brief and closely related.  This works best with cause and effect information.  (Kristi’s skating routine is the best; she won six gold medals. It rained all day; our picnic was cancelled.)
      • Use semicolons when writing compound sentences using a conjunctive adverb or transitional words or phrases. Some of the conjunctive adverbs are accordingly, also, besides, consequently, finally, furthermore, hence, however, instead, moreover, nevertheless, otherwise, similarly, still, therefore, thus.   Common transitional words include as a result, for example, in addition, in fact, in other words, on the other hand. (I have not had much time to devote to my studies; nevertheless, I take a major test on Tuesday. I have been spending all of my free time watching videos; as a result, I have not read my novel.)
      • Use semicolons instead of commas between items in a series if the items themselves contain commas. (Next week the President will visit Norfolk, Virginia; Cincinnati, Ohio, and San Antonio, Texas.)
    • Apostrophes:
      • Form a contraction by using an apostrophe in place of the letter or letters than have been omitted. (I’ll = I will, he’s = he is, isn’t = is not, wasn’t = was not)
      • Form the possessive of singular and plural nouns by using an apostrophe. (boy’s book, boys’ books, children’s toys)
      • Form the plural of letters, symbols, numbers, and signs with apostrophe plus s (’s).  (9’s, B’s, 7’s, #’s)
    • Italics:
      • Use italics for the titles of books, newspapers, magazines, musical compilations, works of art, ships, television shows.
    • Quotations:
      • Use quotation marks to set of the titles of songs, short stories, poems, articles, essays, short plays, television episodes, movie scenes, and book chapters.
      • Quotation marks are used at the beginning and end of the speaker’s words to separate what is being said from the rest of the sentences.  Since the quotation tells what is being said, it will always have quotation marks around it.
      • Use single quotation marks to enclose a quotation within a quotation.
      • Use a period at the end of explanatory words that come at the end of a sentence.
      • Use a comma to separate a direct quotation from the explanatory words.  If the introduction to the quote is an independent clause, use a colon.  Do not use a comma if the quote is made a part of the sentence itself.
      • Commas and periods always go inside the quotation marks, and colons and semicolons go outside.
  • Commonly Confused Words
    • Affect/Effect
      • Affect- to influence
        • Ex: Lack of sleep affects the quality of work
      • Effect- (noun) result; (verb) to accomplish
        • Ex: The subtle effect of the lighting made the room look ominous.
    • Precede/ Proceed
      • Precede- to come before
        • Ex: Pre-writing precedes the rough draft of good papers
      • Proceed- to go forward
        • “You may proceed.” said the voice
    • Lose/ Loose
      • Lose- (verb) to misplace or not win
        • Ex: If we lose this game we won’t get pizza.
      • Loose- (adjective) to not be tight; (verb) (rarely used) to release
        • Ex: The bolt was so loose on the bike that it came off.
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